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我是高中生 程度大概是英檢初級
作文的題目是
"The Present That I Want To Give My Mother/My Father Is ___"
根據一個學生的能力,請說出在母親節(父親節)或是母親(父親)生日時,最想送給母親(父親),表達感恩的禮物是什麼,並加以解釋原因.
大概100字左右就可以了 我之前寫了一篇...被退件 因為我寫的禮物 不是具體的 所以老師說不行 一定要是具體的 ex:蛋糕 卡片
我還要再重寫一篇....禮拜1補交 請大大們幫忙幫忙
Update:
可否直接列一下文章 大概50字~100字就好...因為我個人英文很破 沒有idea了
Update 2:
這好像不是很好....因為我好像不能當禮物送給別人...你可以幫我用些簡單又具體的東西 短短的寫1段好嗎 蛋糕也好 卡片也好....
Update 3:
我的想法是....我最想要送給媽媽的母親節禮物是一朵康乃馨 因為大家自今都是把它當成象徵母親的花......目前想到這方面的
Update 4:
可以呀
Update 5:
謝摟

All Comments

Lily avatarLily2009-06-24
具體的喔~我覺得抽象的會更好耶!
像是全心全意的心!哈哈!既然不行那就算了~
The Present That I Want To Give My Mother/My Father Is ___
is a new me.
你送給你爸媽一個全心的自己吧!
就說你長大了!
更成熟的一個自己
更加懂事的兒子或女兒
2009-06-20 16:03:52 補充:
I want to give them a new me as their present.
A new one who respcet everyone,espeacially to his father and mother.
A new guy who is mature enough to decide everything in his life.
A new son who won't let his father and mother worry about him anymore.
I want to let them are so proud of their son
2009-06-20 18:43:50 補充:
那我也無能為力了耶~
除非你要把你自己的想法拋出來
我才能幫你想
我真的覺得實質的東西並不是父母最想要的
2009-06-20 20:46:36 補充:
sry我不知道康乃馨有甚麼好寫的~~
2009-06-21 19:07:55 補充:
送一張卡片你覺得呢?
2009-06-21 19:25:28 補充:
The Present That I Want To Give My Mother Is a card.
I want to give my mother a card was made by me as her gift on the Mother’s day.
Because my mom doesn’t want me to waste money to buy anything to her,she just hope that I am healthy and happy and that is enough to her.
2009-06-21 19:25:52 補充:
Making a card only costs 20-40 NT dollars so that my mom won’t think I waste money.And I also think there’s somthing can’t be replaced in my card,is my full of heart.
2009-06-21 19:26:10 補充:
I hope that she can feel my thankful to her in my card when she is reading,even after ten or twenty years old,she still can memorize what that day was and what my feeling to her.Mostly,I want her know that I’ll love her forever and ever from this card I made.
2009-06-21 19:26:30 補充:
she still can memorize what that day was and what my feeling to her.Mostly,I want her know that I'll love her forever and ever from this card I made.
2009-06-21 19:30:08 補充:
唉唷 打太快很多錯字
第一行by me改成by myself
第七行的ten or twenty years 沒有old
最後一段的meno~改成recall
sorry
2009-06-21 19:30:42 補充:
I want to let her know~~~~~
2009-06-21 19:31:22 補充:
not from this card i made
IN 應該會好點